Your hard work shows
I definatley enjoyed listening to this one. However, that said, there are a few things I would like to point out. While the intro sounds good, it really doesn't need to be as long as it is, in my opinion. The transition at 2:45 sounded a little strange to me. A bit rushed in a sense, as in the transition happened too quickly. I like your transition at 3:36 though. My favorite part of this song had to be your theme that comes in at 2:18 and again at 4:04, that was well done.